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2013/10/18 発行

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I agree with you. I'd like to be an organ donor when I die to make someone who can use my organs live well. But like you, my wife is against it. She says she would like to say good bye to my body with no lack of organs after my death.(234文字)

(添削版:I agree with you. I'd like to be an organ donor when I die to help someone live longer and better with my organs.. But like you, my wife is against it. She says that when I die and she has to say goodbye to me, my body should have all its organs. .)
(先生から)
It's a difficult issue, isn't it? How we want to be treated is sometimes different from how we want to treat others, like family members.


2013/10/16 06:28 by SAMURAI [照会No.88353]



'Soap Decorations' class using pictures from paper napkins was held. You don't need any special skills, but the works look greatl! Elder people completed easy and beautifully in a short time! I was very pleased as an organizer of this class.(243文字)

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(先生から)
Were you able to send a form to the Customer Service Department? If so, please disregard this. If not, you may be doubly charged.


2013/10/16 13:14 by 名無しさん [照会No.88409]



Typhoon has passed, and after that it was getting a clear sky in my area. So I dug up the old soil and mixed compost into it. Because I will plant a lot of tulips and hyacinths in my garden at the end of this month.(215文字)

(添削版:The typhoon has passed, and the sky has already started clearing up in my area. That being the case, I dug up the old soil and mixed compost into it, because I am going to plant a lot of tulips and hyacinths in my garden at the end of this month. )
(先生から)
Clear skies are a good sign! You'll have a beautiful garden when your flowers bloom. Do you usually plant those kinds of flowers every year?


2013/10/16 16:32 by 名無しさん [照会No.88428]



Not so bad because there became quiet around 12 midnight. There are many small booths, a large amount of comics, and a free drink corner in general Internet cafes. Most customers surf the internet with a cup of soft drink in one hand, lying on a reclining chair. Whether good or bad, it is the most suitable place for killing time.(331文字)

(添削版:It’s not so bad, because it finally became quiet around midnight. There are many small rooms (kind of like cubicles), a large amount of comic books and a free drink corner at most Internet cafes. The majority of customers surf the Internet while drinking a soft drinkand sitting in a reclining chair. Whether good or bad, it is the most suitable place for killing time. )
(先生から)
I agree. They make great places to kill time, and they're quite comfortable. My husband took me to one, because he wanted to play video games :|


2013/10/16 19:24 by Naoki [照会No.88460]



By train. It run with a bit of delay. And It wash't cloudy, so I could have a seat.(84文字)

(添削版:I went by train. There was a bit of a delay. However, since it wasn't crowded, I was able to find a seat.)
(先生から)
I see. For some reason, I thought the trains might be crowded, but I guess many people stayed home or went by car. The storm passed over, right?


2013/10/16 19:46 by 名無しさん [照会No.88462]



My husband occasionally stays overnight Internet cafe, after he missed the last train. It's cheaper than taking a taxi to home.(127文字)

(添削版:My husband occasionally stays overnight at an Internet cafe if he misses the last train. It's cheaper than taking a taxi home.)
(先生から)
Really? I didn't know that. What time is the last train? I thought the trains ran around the clock, so I've learned two new things. Thanks ;)


2013/10/16 19:58 by emim [照会No.88464]



[QA]Which do you mean you want to find some international news sites in Japanese or domestic news ones written in English? For the former, I can tell you 'MSN' or 'Yahoo', while the latter, I recommend you 'The Japan Times'. I am not sure, but I hope this suits for your question. (277文字)

(添削版:Did you mean that you want to find some international news sites in Japanese, or domestic ones written in English? For the former, I can recommend 'MSN' or 'Yahoo'. However, for the latter, I would recommend 'The Japan Times'. I am not sure, but I hope this answers your question. )
(先生から)
Those are great recommendations. I wonder if the person has checked out the online version of The New York Times. That's also good reading.


2013/10/16 20:30 by 名無しさん [照会No.88467]



Fortunately there's no serious damage by the typhoon in my area. I'm concerned about many missing people in the damaged areas.(126文字)

(添削版:Fortunately, there's no serious damage from the typhoon in my area. However, I'm concerned about the missing people in the damaged areas.)
(先生から)
Me too! I hope that the rescuers are able to find everyone. However, I'm glad to hear that your area didn't receive a lot of damages. Take care!


2013/10/16 20:31 by emim [照会No.88468]



[悩み]One of my friends encouraged me to make friends from foreign countries is makes me improve of my skills of English while I don't know how to do it. Does anyone know about that?(176文字)

(添削版:One of my friends encouraged me to make friends from foreign countries to help me improve my English skills, but I don't know how to go about it. Does anyone have any suggestions?)
(先生から)
If you meet a foreigner, don't tell them that you want to be friends so that you can learn English. They'll feel used. Also, try to be outgoing.


2013/10/16 21:59 by carrimomoramen [照会No.88479]



Today's my work is to imput much deta into excel sheet. It takes 3 hours after starting it, but over half of datas is not inputed yet. I feels tired!(149文字)

(添削版:Today, I have to input a lot of data into an excel sheet. It will take 3 hours from start to finish, but I still have over half of it to do. I am exhausted! )
(先生から)
Long days at the office are never fun, especially if you're just inputting data hour after hour. Do you drink a lot of coffee to keep you alert?


2013/10/17 01:46 by 名無しさん [照会No.88519]



[動画]AKB48 is the group for children from the last generation. Whilst Ms.Matsuda and Ms.Yamaguchi are the idles for our parents. However, they are still respected very much.(168文字)

(添削版:AKB48 is a group for the previous generation of young people. However, Ms. Matsuda and Ms. Yamaguchi are idols from our parents’ generation. That being said, they are still highly respected. )
(先生から)
Oh, I see! Thank you for explaining that to me. Those two idols must have really made an impact on people. Who is your favorite idol?


2013/10/17 02:25 by afu [照会No.88525]



I agree that most of elderly don't know how to use the internet. So I will be surprised to find a few who can do it well.(121文字)

(添削版:I agree that most elderly don't know how to use the Internet. Actually, I would be surprised to find a few who can use it well.)
(先生から)
I've seen a few impressive elderly people, but my grandmother was not among them ;) She has a PC, but she is afraid to even use it.


2013/10/17 02:28 by afu [照会No.88527]


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